Homework...

[81-Honda-04]

In my English class we have to write a sonnet (like a shakesprear peice) I wrote mine about my 400ex! this is rust a rough draft so not done yet, hope you like it! let me know if you have any ideas? for the final draft.

Ride
She is red, like a cardinal that flies free A
Fast like a cheetah running after its prey B
As strong as steel, or a big oak tree A
She simply Splashes through mud and clay B

Riding everywhere everyday C
Making her shine like she deserves to be D
Getting covered in mud water and hey C
Getting that feeling when I turn the key D

Dirt covers the air when I ride E
The joys sound of the motor purring F
The earth is like a blur to my side E
Jumping and splashing it never gets boring F

Motor without you where would be go? G
With you we might someday go pro. G

[quadbod]

Originally posted by 81-Honda-04
In my English class we have to write a sonnet (like a shakesprear peice) I wrote mine about my 400ex! this is rust a rough draft so not done yet, hope you like it! let me know if you have any ideas? for the final draft.

Ride
She is red, like a cardinal that flies free A
Fast like a cheetah running after its prey B
As strong as steel, or a big oak tree A
She simply Splashes through mud and clay B

Riding everywhere everyday C
Making her shine like she deserves to be D
Getting covered in mud water when I play C
Getting that feeling when I turn the key D

Dirt covers the air when I ride E
The joyous sound of the motor purring F
The earth is like a blur by my side E
When the throttle is opened my speach starts slurring F

Motor without you where would be go? G
With you we might someday thurn pro. G

I like it, but if it were mine....I made the changes in your quote /\/\/\/\/\/\

[honda400ex2003]

nice, steve

[Tommy Warren]

\/\/()\/\/ Thats deep!!:(

[honda400ex2003]

howd it come out for ya? steve

[Gagt518]

Pretty good man

[elmer91]

its good, i like the topic, and it has a lot of imagery, but from a poetic point of view, your time is all messed up. you switch from trochaic to iambic, and you dont have set amount of feet, though you use 5 feet a lot. if you fixed it so it is iambic pentameter, which is what most sonnets are in, then it will be a great poem. and just so you all know, i just did cover poems on my english class, and i notice this stuff now.

[81-Honda-04]

when i posted that it was just the RD but i finished it and presented it to the class ill put the FD up and how i did on it when i get it back! my teached said it was good after i presented so thats a plus!

[bbender85]

Originally posted by elmer91
its good, i like the topic, and it has a lot of imagery, but from a poetic point of view, your time is all messed up. you switch from trochaic to iambic, and you dont have set amount of feet, though you use 5 feet a lot. if you fixed it so it is iambic pentameter, which is what most sonnets are in, then it will be a great poem. and just so you all know, i just did cover poems on my english class, and i notice this stuff now.


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i like turtles.

[powermadd400ex]

Originally posted by bbender85
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i like turtles.

i love lamp

[elmer91]

Originally posted by bbender85
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i like turtles.

lol. he did better than i did. tried writing one, and failed.