thinking about using these lyrics in my bands next song..

[Greg Z]

well I like them but I was wondering what you guys think about it.. its 4 AM and no ones on so im gonna post it on EXriders since I know ill get some honest opinions

our first show is aug 4th and we need a new song and some intro breakdown material for when we get on stage since its our first show:devil:

anyways here it is

Pull this trigger see these white skys. Pull this trigger see these white skys. to bury your sins to the end of your days. inside my fictional prison. To see these days pass by with every unforgiving claim. today twenty degrees night fall on this afternoon day. visions blurred. covering my eyes. why steal innocent illusions of this truth. the sun will rise soon

[zephead400ex]

Lyrics don't sound bad, would help if we could hear the music being played with them.

"why steal innocent illusions of this truth"

^^that is a pretty cool line

[devildriver422]

hey not bad...wut kinda music u play?

[Greg Z]

hardcore

[Syrus]

Dude, can i get a demo or anything recorded ? let me know i wanna hear ur music.. send to critical_point07@hotmail.com if u have anything on mp3 or on ur comp yet.

[Greg Z]

www.hxcmp3.com/bands/6555

its live recording at a basment show the quality is crappy